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English Composition – Understanding the Rubrics(Part 1)

English Composition is one of the most difficult component of English. You are given approximately an hour to develop a plot and pen it down on paper in class. Whatever that has been written will be read and graded.

In the previous introduction post I mentioned that it is no longer just stating point blank what you see in the picture in front of you. There is the need to analyse in detail the scenario that has been presented and give a thorough explanation of  what had occurred with your own reflections.

Before you are able to score well in composition writing you have to understand  how the composition is assessed.

The main focus

The main focus

CLO  is what being tested in English Composition.    Around 60% of the marks are being allocated to the Content while 40% to Language and Organization the essay.

What is content? 

It is the information in the essay which makes up the story.

The words and sentences that are used to piece together and develop ideas which the writer has so that everyone else is able to understand his train of thought. Through the words that are penned down the reader must be able to visualize and experience for himself what had happened when the event occurred. In short, the reader is watching a playback of a show in his mind instead of seeing it on TV.

How to score for content?

Make your story interesting.

– Fully adequate and thoroughly  develop your story line. Make your essay highly interesting.

– Use lots of descriptive words, idioms or even metaphors to explain what you saw and felt.

-develop your ideas into paragraphs and provide strong evidence to support your stance.

– have a strong  and persuasive conclusion

Picture 1

Picture 1

In the picture above you see three people – an elderly man crossing the road, a girl standing at the side of the road and a driver. How would you describe the picture that you see above?

Model  description – A

While walking home  I saw an old man crossing the road. I also saw a car going towards the zebra crossing.

Model description -B

It was a hot and sunny afternoon. While walking back home from school I suddenly heard the screeching of  brakes. I immediately looked towards the road and was shocked stiff to see a sports car zooming towards the feeble old man who was crossing the road.

Which description- A or B would make you more interested to read on and find out what happened next in the essay?

I’m sure 5/5 would have said Model description B.

What is the difference between A and B? Both are talking about the same thing but in B 5W 1H is being applied.

5W 1H

This refers to the questions- Who, What, When, Where, Why and How which one must ask while developing the story.

Who?- The feeble old man,the student, the driver

What?- An  road accident was going to happen

When?- After school in the afternoon

Where?- On the road on the way home from school

Why?- The driver was speeding and didn’t stop in time 

How? – Speeding and couldn’t control the car., Not focusing on driving carefully.

* Do note that not all aspects of 5W1H needs to be used in each paragraph however it does need to be covered in detail within the whole essay.

In the 2nd part of this post I will be explaining what to look out under Language and Organization.

Post in this series

1)Learning with Dominique- English Composition(An Introduction)

2)English Composition – Understanding the Rubrics(Part 1)

3) English composition- Understanding the Rubrics(Part 2)

4) English Composition- Common Mistakes

5) English Composition- The changes to PSLE  come 2015

 

10 Pictures taken at Polliwogs @Vivocity

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The main play area

The main play area

Over on the weekend we were invited to the latest branch of Polliwogs which has recently opened at Vivo City. The kids have been to the branches at East Coast and Robertson Walk and I was interested to see how this franchise fared compared to the other two.

Located on Level 3 , two doors down from Modestos the place was smaller then I had expected and even though there wasn’t really a crowd when we were there on a Saturday there wasn’t space in the shoe rack for the kids and I to place our shoes and we had to put them on the floor in a corner instead before we entered the play area.

One of the colourful walls at the lobby

One of the colourful walls at the lobby

The kids couldn’t wait to enter the indoor playground and rushed through the door once their temperature had been taken and their hands sanitized.

Tiger girl asking me to follow her up the playscape

Tiger girl asking me to follow her up the playscape

As Doggie boy disappeared into playscape before I could instruct him to play together with his sister I had to follow her around through it. It wasn’t a good decision as the structure was built for kids in mind I got stuck at several of the obstacles inside the playscape.

Tiger girl going through a hole

Tiger girl going through a hole

Being around 90cm tall she easily went through this hole. However at 1.65m tall I got stuck while going through it. Luckily there weren’t any other kids behind us as it took me quite a while to get through the hole.

A tube to climb through in the playscape

A tube to climb through in the playscape

Luckily Tiger girl didn’t want to go through this tube when I was in the playscape with her. I doubt it would be able support the weight of an adult through it.

Doggie boy on the trampoline while Tiger girl put balls into the air canon.

Doggie boy on the trampoline while Tiger girl put balls into the air canon.

The difference between this branch and the other two branches is that there is a small trampoline area where kids can bounce around. Tiger girl didn’t try out the trampoline as she didn’t fancy being lodge in the holes if she should lose her footing while bouncing around. Doggie boy enjoyed it though.

The kids going down the slide

The kids going down the slide

At the end of the playscape there was a row of four slides together. Slides are one Tiger girl’s favourite at an indoor playground. However she only went down this slide once and couldn’t be coaxed down it again. It was shorter then the ones that she and her brothers have been on and I guess it wasn’t much of a thrill to go on for a 3 year old.

Tiger girl and Doggie boy spinning themselves silly

Tiger girl and Doggie boy spinning themselves silly

Both of them preferred the spinning poles to the slide and happy went round and round on it. It must really feel very “high” being all dizzy with all the spinning.

 

The toddler area

The toddler area

There was an area for toddlers beside the main playscape for kids 0-3 years old. There was a small ball pit, spinning cups, a small carousel and play stations along the wall.

The cafe area

The cafe area

There was a snack area with tables for parents to wait around and have a drink while their kids play. There is the normal array of drinks and finger foods available.

Tiger girl having a snack in one of the two function rooms

Tiger girl having a snack in one of the two function rooms

There are two function rooms at Polliwogs where one can book to celebrate birthdays or have a function. There is even a nursing room in the premise for parents with very young babies.

The only gripe I have is that there isn’t any toilets within the premise like the other indoor playgrounds which I have been to. I had a hard time searching for  the kids and getting all of them go exit the indoor playground to go to the toilet together when one of them needed to go to the toilet.  Even though the toilets were located fairly near it still wasn’t safe to let Doggie boy  venture out of the playground to the toilet and back unsupervised while I was supervising Tiger girl at play.

Polliwogs @ Vivocity

10am - 9pm DAILY

 

Disclaimer: We were given complimentary entry to Polliwogs. All opinions are 100% my own.